Bless you, I love it when a writer takes to heart what I advise in a positive manner and doesn't fly off the handle at me. I think your idea is perfect and will reap benefits from a longer read and therefore more reading time money for you. You only have to edit that second part into the story and then republish it yourself. I think you could add a lot of humour to this story in the telling of how not to piss people off. :)